The Sheriff’s Collector . . .
Montrachet’s skies certainly did not weep for me when we left. The blue that blinded one stretched as far as the eye could see and the white rock of southern Aquitaine intensified the glare. I did not weep either, but my handmaid, Marais, sniffed until I told her to desist.
‘It’s like the Holy Land,’ Guy grumbled as we headed away, by which I presume he meant the heat of the south.
‘You have been there?’ I confess I too was hot and took no time when we took a comfort stop at one stage, in removing my chemise and just wearing my gown so that my arms were bare.
I had lifted my hair into a coronet on my head, well away from a neck that had been sweaty and over-heated. Guy eyed my appearance when I returned from behind a rock, but at that point said nothing.
‘No, I have not. But it is my plan,’ was his rejoinder.
‘Why is it that all men feel they must go to the Holy Land as a right of passage. Why is it necessary to kill a Saracen before you can call yourself a man?’
‘You do not believe in the Christian fight then?’
‘I do not. What right do we have to tramp men of strong belief into the ground in their own country? It is not something my God would ask of His believers. Of that I am sure.’
‘Then you think King Henry has been wrong?’
‘I do and I have no doubt his Queen thinks the same.’ I pushed back a stray lock of hair and noticed Guy looking at my raised bare arm. ‘In the time I have been in Montrachet, I have met traveling Saracens who are erudite, great healers, men of learning that make us look like primitives.’ I snorted. ‘But what hope do we women have of stopping such madness as a crusade. Men are stupid sometimes,’ I added with just enough disrespect to make a point.
‘As are women who parade before men with bare arms and uncovered heads. Lady, for myself I don’t mind. But we have men at arms with us who may not be so couth.’ He made a point of his own with a severe expression that cooled the air. Nothing like the man I had met yesterday and who had opened a door for me to a new life away from Montrachet, and heated my skin like a ray of southern sun.
I sighed with no attempt at concealing my petulance. ‘Oh for heavens’ sake. I am showing no more than their own mothers and wives show in the fields.’
‘Without doubt,’ he replied in a superior manner. ‘But you are nobility and should act accordingly.’
I turned to see if he was serious and God help me, he was. His face had not a vestige of a smile. I’m afraid I could not contain myself and burst out laughing. ‘My memory of Moncrieff, such as it is, is that the nobility create their own rules as they go along. Today’s bad taste could be tomorrow’s new fashion.’ Then I added as an after thought, ‘Rather like a crusade.’ To which his mouth gave a twitch that flipped my belly upside down.
‘You make your point, Lady Ysabel. But let me say, the attitudes of Aquitaine have been your life for eight years. You may have forgotten what England is like. There is a stiff decorum in the houses of the nobility with whom you will associate. It is best you realize that now, before you reach Moncrieff. It would not do to upset the Baron.’
I felt put upon. ‘So I have spent eight years learning to be something which will not suit England when I could have been back in Moncrieff being truly happy.’
Our horses jogged a little and conversation became difficult, but I felt my calf rub against Guy’s and our stirrups clinked. I pushed my mare apart although I would have been happy to rub alongside for a while longer. I tried not to analyse what this man stirred in me, endeavouring to enjoy every moment. To be truthful, I did not want to countenance any fact that he may not feel the same.
As our horses settled, he commented. ‘Perhaps both your parents thought you would marry in Aquitaine and it would thus be time well spent.’
‘Marry any of those effetes?’ My voice had lifted and I laughed again. ‘Sir, poetry and chivalry are all very well, but I crave to marry a man.’
My mare had jogged ahead again and all I heard from behind was a very low, ‘Indeed.’
Our first, second and third days past in such fashion. We chatted about anything and everything that was superficial and yet as we talked, I felt I came to know the man a little more. The erudition of a mere squire surprised me. He talked of Welsh stories, legends he called by a strange name, Mabinogi, and he knew Chrétien de Troyes’ words as well, and conversed readily. He mentioned an enjoyment of visiting small libraries of the nobility when he traveled with my father and with former employers. We talked of illuminated manuscripts and I told him of my admiration of the church scribes. In all, I was surprised he knew so much. He even quoted poetry written by Prince Richard and written during his times in Aquitaine.
During one of our nightly encampments, Marais and I sat under a canopy Guy and the escort would rig for us. I watch him moving among the men with assurance and with an air of command that seemed to come naturally. It was not quite dark and being mild, he worked in a chemise, strapping his horse with wads of grass and chatting with the men. He towered over the escort and I could see the width of his shoulder as he dragged the twisted grass over the sweat marks on his mount. Marais muttered about her own saddle sores but I allowed her complaint to drift over me. And then Guy turned and our eyes met.
His gaze held mine and I could not help my lips curving slightly before I lowered my head and flicked grass seeds from my hem. But I knew, as sure as the moon would rise that night that a thread existed between us. It might be fine and breakable, but a thread nevertheless, and I still had six weeks left to encourage its strengthening.
I can’t decide what is better: your writing, which is superb or the pictures, which – well they speak for themselves – but both together is just sublime! Meanwhile left wondering what could have happened to that thread?
iz4blue, what you have said is a writer’s dream review and I am very grateful. I would ask a question though: would you still read the story without the images? Would it still draw you in?
I have been thinking about that because I would think you couldn’t use them if you were to publish this story. But surely you didn’t by chance come upon the name mesmered by chance? You so deserve it as I find your writing mesmerizing. I remember your note about how freeing the writing for this is NOT following rules. That reminded me of another recent famous author (loved&criticised equally) who actually broke all those rules. She’s currently producing the 4th movie of her bookserie. You have my utter admiration because I take time mulling over just a trivial comment here so I can just about imagine how a story can consume someone’s thoughts. Then perhaps it just flows out of you! There have been a few sentences that felt too contemporary in frazing. So on my part I can feel when sometimes it feels wrong but most of the time it feels right. Not that that means much but it’s starting to feel you’re taking it beyond fanfiction.
You say such wonderful things and its so nice to be spurred on like this. I agree with you, there have been some severe anachronistic phrases which occurred when it seemed to be a piece of fun fan-fict, but the story suddenly took me by the throat and directed me into a more dedicated fiction-style, and historically biased at that.
I have just said to Lua that it is providing me with a framework for a potentially much larger novel which requires research and more serious application.
In the meantime, read it as fan-fict and enjoy. Who knows where it will go!
Following is a comment of a tweet friend i send the link to your Sheriff Posts: “Finished it!Very good!Combination of narrative & pics work great! I like her cliffhangers..what/who broke the thread? Weekly posts?”
You know a writer of a published novel craves such comment. Thank your friend for me.
“His gaze held mine and I could not help my lips curving slightly before I lowered my head and flicked grass seeds from my hem.”
I just LOVE your writing Prue- and this story keeps getting better and better! (and great pictures) 🙂
Thanks Lua. Your comments mean such a lot!
Have to agree, that is a great line! Must confess it is a new experience for me to be able to give feedback to a writer. I want to look up that book you mentioned as being such a big inspiration in your youth. It reminded of a book (collection of Greek Mythology) I read over and over in my teens and still have although its been awhile since I’ve read it. Good luck with building that framework and looking forward to the development this tale.
This is getting better and better. A thread between them? I hope that though invisible and forgotten, it still remains there linking their past & futures.
um, ok, this story is soo good that until I read the first comment on this page I realized I hadn’t noticed the pictures on this page….
That’s good to know Ann Marie, because it’s important to me that the story hangs on its own merits, and not on Richard Armitage’s face and physique. Besides all the images have been in a thousand places before my blog. Almost stale!
The fact that Ann Marie missed those pix (she’s not immune to his charms 😉 says it all about your prose. Meanwhile I can die of shame re-reading my old words from months past! Not the praise but my noseyness!
It’s been adorable reading Ann Marie’s reaction and I know another friend found you too!
Btw just told the hubs all I want for Christmas (not RA like the vid LOL) is your books!